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(All right, guys, this is not the story I'm working on, but it's a story nonetheless. Note: the characters in these stories are actually toys. :PONE: Wonderland Ah, yes, welcome hither, stranger. Step through this portal right here. It'll be fine, I assure, we'll land on soft grass. Please, go first. Whoosh. Ah, see, what did I tell you? Come, let's look around. 'Tis a pretty place, eh? Oh, you see that large tree over there? There are a few Wonderlanders there, if you look for them.. What's that? Oh, it's Dinky. You see that yellow bird singing? Yep, that's her. She acts as the alarm for the Wonderlanders. Every dawn, she trills and so awakens the people in the land. Under her live Squirrey. As you might have already guessed, he's a flying squirrel. He and Dinky are great friends, really. He actually has a sister, Nutsy Daisy, who moved to Middleland to seek her fortune. She is now a very renowned writer. "Oh, Jason!" Oh, no, hide, please! Here, come under this bush. Wait and see. No, don't say a word. There! You see that brown bear with a yellow ribbon around her neck? That's Calida. And you see that polar bear with a scar on his face? That's Jason, his wife. Their tale ... oh, well, Calida had her husband sign a treaty that he would agree to be very nice to her and to do anything she asked him to. He consented, and thus now he is ruled over by his wife. It's funny because he's a Wonder Guard (they guard the land from the Outsiders - the evil creatures). He's so afraid of his wife now. ... And his worst day is Friday - for then Calida takes him to Boris' Bar and there she gets drunk. Good, they're going back in. Here come their children... Yes, those red bears with the pictures of hearts on their chests are the "Love Bears". They can sense it when someone's in love. Yes, I know the other one is fatter than that one. They're a bit different in their names. The fatter one is "I Love You!" and his twin is "I Love You". Their other brother, beside them, the blue bear ... His name is "Little Champ". He's training to be a Junior Guard of Wonderland. Taking after his father's footsteps. I hear humming. And yes! There's Froggie and Doggie making their escape. Yes, they are related. Froggie was a dog, but a great plague came to the land and changed many creatures into something they are not. Oh, look at them run! That can only mean one thing: Muffie's coming. Look, that's their father. That dog with the bulging belly and a nightcap on his head and a scarf around his neck. Now, he loves muffins, and does nothing all day but bake and eat muffins. His children have grown tired of it, and that's why they keep trying to escape. But I hear Froggie's got a job at a chapatti store in Middleland. So it's Doggie who should watch out... Come let's sit here a while.
Ai! laurië lantar lassi súrinen,
yéni únótimë ve rámar aldaron!
Yéni ve lintë yuldar avánier
mi oromardi lissë-miruvóreva
Andúnë pella, Vardo tellumar
nu luini yassen tintilar i eleni
ómaryo airetári-lírinen.
Sí man i yulma nin enquantuva?
An sí Tintallë Varda Oiolossëo
ve fanyar máryat Elentári ortanë,
ar ilyë tier undulávë lumbulë;
ar sindanóriello caita mornië
i falmalinnar imbë met, ar hísië
untúpa Calaciryo míri oialë.
Sí vanwa ná, Rómello vanwa, Valimar!
Namárië! Nai hiruvalyë Valimar!
Nai elyë hiruva! Namárië!
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You've caught my interest.
I like the storyteller/guide figure who tells you about wonderland and it's inhabitans.
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Thanks, Oggie. Continuation (I didn't get to finish the last post - My brother came in and I had to leave...) "Aaaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrreeeeeeee you lonesome tonight ..." Hmm. Are you wondering where that song is coming from? Look up. You see that rather full chimpanzee with that really short tail? That's Chimpy. He lies down on that oak tree all day doing nothing but sing his songs. He sings at Boris' Bar every so often too. He's not as famous as Dinodoodle and Matilda in Middleland with their hits "La La La" and "Wobble Wobble Wobble", but people enjoy his songs because they have LYRICS. And to top it off, he has a very nice voice. Come, we have further to go. Oh, that? Yes, I see the smoke. Strange smell, it has, doesn't it? Well, there's where Mrs. Elizabeth lives. She's the doctor here: she has all the potions that will cure wolf scratches, bites, everything. She's forcing her young son, Elfie, to hurry up and make his own brand of healing potion, the "Elfie Special". He's been working on it, but hasn't really finished it. Why? Oh, you'll see. ... Come, we're going to miss it ... Miss what? Oh, you make me laugh. The Fantastic Five are holding a meeting, didn't you know? And I hear it --- the Yurples are making their move. This is going to be good. I'm sorry, how stupid of me... You don't know the Fantastic Five, do you? Well, it consists of five Wonderlanders: Little Champ, Froggie (their leader), Doggie, Elfie and I Love You. They're just children, but they think they're the heroes of the land... you know how kids are. So far their most hated enemies are the Yurples - not-too-small mouse-lion like creatures who tunnel back and forth from the three lands. They're outlaws, but they really don't care. They cause trouble everywhere they go, but no one has been able to catch them. Oh, they're not here yet. Let's wait. (Sorry, but I'm getting a bit bored, so I'll continue next time ... :P )
Ai! laurië lantar lassi súrinen,
yéni únótimë ve rámar aldaron!
Yéni ve lintë yuldar avánier
mi oromardi lissë-miruvóreva
Andúnë pella, Vardo tellumar
nu luini yassen tintilar i eleni
ómaryo airetári-lírinen.
Sí man i yulma nin enquantuva?
An sí Tintallë Varda Oiolossëo
ve fanyar máryat Elentári ortanë,
ar ilyë tier undulávë lumbulë;
ar sindanóriello caita mornië
i falmalinnar imbë met, ar hísië
untúpa Calaciryo míri oialë.
Sí vanwa ná, Rómello vanwa, Valimar!
Namárië! Nai hiruvalyë Valimar!
Nai elyë hiruva! Namárië!
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That sounds interesting, yet it is a bit difficult to remember everybody because there are so many characters. I'm eager to see how everything unfolds and what your story might be about.
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Well, Star? Nothing more on this story... did you give it up, then? I also started writing a short story myself (a Romanian classic fairytale sort of story) but I could not go on with it because of the exams. On the other hand, I can spare some minutes to read others' tales. :)
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Haha, not exactly abandoned it, this story is just something I do for fun, and not for serious writing. So I continue and discontinue on and on. But for your sake, I will continue again. :) C-ontinuation. Wait, here they come. Here's Little Champ and I Love You, and Froggie and Doggie, who's riding on Elfie. They take their place at their log. Froggie calls for order (he sits at the head) and they all turn to him. "Right, you all know the reason we're here," he says in a matter-of-fact voice. "We oppose the Yurples. Did you know they stole some of Mr. Peanut's ... erm ... what was that thing?" "Peanuts?" offered Elfie. Froggie tries to click his fingers, bur realizes he doesn't have fingers. "Yes, Mr. Peanut's ... peanuts. They also created havoc in Middleland, barging onto Dinodoodle and Matilda's concert, while they were wobbling their heads to 'Wobble Wobble Wobble'." "Froggie, the Outlands?" pipes up Little Champ. "You know what they did there, right?" "Erk, of course. But let's not mention it." "Why, what'd they do??" cries Doggie and I Love You at once. Froggie takes a deep breath. "They pulled Shere-Kham's tail." There is a moment of silence, then a great outburst of laughter. They all roll over the log, clutching at their stomachs, and gesturing 'tail' and 'pull'. What's so funny, you ask? Shere-Kham's the leader of the Outsiders, and is very strong, believe me. But he doesn't like it when anyone pulls his tail or flicks his forehead. He gets agitated then. Oh, look, look! Dinky's flying towards them. I wonder, what's she doing? ... "Hey guys!" she cries. "You guys know that the Yurples are coming right?" "Coming where?" asks Froggie, trying to wipe away the tears from his unusually large eyes. "Here! I hear them tunnelling!" Dinky seems anxious. Then she says shakily, "Well, I have to go, Squirrey will be waiting!" She flies off. "Settle, settle!" cries Froggie, and everyone scrambles back into their seats. "Now, there are no words ... That's it! There are no words!" The ground below them starts to rumble. "They're here!" cries Elfie, and they all stumble behind the log, taking the offensive position. "Ready ..." whispers Little Champ. (I'll continue later, John. I'll leave you at the edge of your seat. :P ) And I'll want to read that Romanian fairytale you're writing when you're free ... :)
Ai! laurië lantar lassi súrinen,
yéni únótimë ve rámar aldaron!
Yéni ve lintë yuldar avánier
mi oromardi lissë-miruvóreva
Andúnë pella, Vardo tellumar
nu luini yassen tintilar i eleni
ómaryo airetári-lírinen.
Sí man i yulma nin enquantuva?
An sí Tintallë Varda Oiolossëo
ve fanyar máryat Elentári ortanë,
ar ilyë tier undulávë lumbulë;
ar sindanóriello caita mornië
i falmalinnar imbë met, ar hísië
untúpa Calaciryo míri oialë.
Sí vanwa ná, Rómello vanwa, Valimar!
Namárië! Nai hiruvalyë Valimar!
Nai elyë hiruva! Namárië!
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You do keep the suspense, Star! But I understand how a writer feels when there are no readers of his/her work. It happened to me too, and it is a reason for my abandoning 'The Shadow from the East', which could have reached as many as 45000 words - the equivalent of 120 pages in the format of the black cover HC 'Silmarillion', which is quite a lot. But when one feels one is writing for oneself only, usually one loses interest or motivation. But I am still waiting: if you have some more, I'd still love to know the whereabouts of this peculiar world of yours, Star.
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Sorry for being late, John. I completely forgot about this. Then a purple head pops out of the ground. It looks like a lion's head, but a lot smaller, with purple mane and a large black snout. It's wearing a very sly expression. Right beside it, plops out another head, the exact replica of the first one, but this one is red instead of purple. They both jump out of the hole in the ground, revealing their small black-pawed hands and feet. They hold hands, and begin to sway together in rhythm. "We are Purple Yurple and Red Yurple," they chant, their bodies swaying. "We are Purple Yurple and Red Yurple." ***(NOTE: If you can, try to imagine them as the two Siamese cats in Walt Disney's "Lady and the Tramp") The Fantastic Five are barely breathing, as they watch the two mouse lions approach. Froggie whispers, "When I say ... one ... two ... GO!" The whole group practically pounces onto the Yurples, who neatly separate to either side, causing the youngsters to fall flat on the soft grass. But they quickly scramble back onto their feet and launch another attack on the Yurples. All I can see now is thick dust, with their respective feet sticking out. I hear punches, don't you? Oh, that one didn't sound nice... Kicks ... I wonder who's winning? No, don't go closer! You don't want to be involved in that! Wait, they're finished. Oh, no. Just as I expected. The Yurples are laughing in their really scruffy voices, and the Fantastic Five look as if they've been tied up together. This is just sad, but this has been happening for as far as I can remember... "Ha Ha Ha!" cries Purple Yurple. "Haven't you seen anything sadder, Red Yurple?" "Not that I can remember of, Purple Yurple." "And they call themselves the Fantastic Five!" "More like the Losing Five!" They bawl with laughter over their own joke. Little Champ gets agitated, and tries to jump on them, but he lands not far from their own pile. Of entangled bodies. "See ya, losers!" exclaims Purple Yurple, and hand in hand, the two mouse lions skip away, and back into their hole. "That's done it," says Froggie as they get up and brush dust off themselves. "They do that always," states I Love You mournfully. "I know, but ..." Doggie stops short, as his ears prick up. "FROGGIE!" "Oh, no..." says the brother. "You don't mean ...?" "OH FROGGIE! DOGGIE! COME AND HELP ME BAKE SOME MUFFINS!!!!" The last thing we see is Froggie and Doggie's retreating figures as they jump into the nearest bush. (That's it for now. I hope you find it funny.)
Ai! laurië lantar lassi súrinen,
yéni únótimë ve rámar aldaron!
Yéni ve lintë yuldar avánier
mi oromardi lissë-miruvóreva
Andúnë pella, Vardo tellumar
nu luini yassen tintilar i eleni
ómaryo airetári-lírinen.
Sí man i yulma nin enquantuva?
An sí Tintallë Varda Oiolossëo
ve fanyar máryat Elentári ortanë,
ar ilyë tier undulávë lumbulë;
ar sindanóriello caita mornië
i falmalinnar imbë met, ar hísië
untúpa Calaciryo míri oialë.
Sí vanwa ná, Rómello vanwa, Valimar!
Namárië! Nai hiruvalyë Valimar!
Nai elyë hiruva! Namárië!
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Nice one, Star. This is a good story to tell a child, I believe. I'm thoroughly enjoying it; well, I keep forgetting who the characters are and I have to look back for them, but it does not matter, as long as you keep the stuff coming from time to time.
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